Can you rate the lyrics I wrote?

Wow! You are very talented. It is a great song i rate it a 5(being the highest). I think you should maybe change some words around because the rhyme scheme isn't equal. Just in the first few lines it's not very equal, but i guess that depends how long your going to hold the note and lryics. Overall, this is a wonderful song and I wish you good luck in the future:)